It don't mean a thing, if it ain't got that swing!
"Any advice you get from ANY source should be taken with a grain of salt..." And here I've just trashed 12 pages of a first chapter of a novel because Miss Snark said...
I said in an earlier post that I don't change a word in novels I just mark them up and send them back. That does not evoke the blood letting screams of agony I hear when the ms arrives back in Authorville. Frequently I've marked out entire paragraphs, pages and on more than one red letter day: entire chapters.
I'm not sure why this is but writers have a hard time jumping right in to the action. There's always some sort of set up like describing a sunset, or their situation or what they're looking at out the window. Out! Out!
However, that writing is not wasted even if it does go in the burgeoning trash can. Everything you write whether you use it or not is part of the process of becoming a good or better writer. It's the equivalent of batting practice. Even the guys batting .400 (damn Yankees!) take batting practice before a game. You should hear a soprana warming up to sing Wagner!
Those twelve pages are batting practice. Now step up to the plate and SWING!