Dear Miss Snark,
Isn't it a bit redundent to say in a query letter that you are "seeking representation"?
OF COURSE I'm seeking representation, why in the heck do you think I took the time to write this letter?
Couldn't you just jump to, "I have written an amateur dective novel of 100,000 words." And go on from there? To me it just seems that you have wasted a very valuable sentence with the "I am seeking representation."
Yes. When I wrote those sentences I was dashing them off to illustrate a point about using clauses. Were I actually writing a query letter I'd have spent more than one minute on it and I'd take out the seeking part. As you know I am a minimalist and I would have pruned as much as possible. Pruning is what makes words into art. This blog is more like a wild bamboo jungle than a bonsai garden. You want the bonsai when you query.