Aya should be dead. Not once, but twice she survives. What is keeping her alive? Is it luck or something more tangible?
In the novel, The Other Side, Aya and her four high school friends suddenly find themselves face to face with death, literally. Banished to the world of the living, a Soul, repenting for the heinous sins of a past life, befriends the teens and struggles to remember how to live again. As secrets come to light, testing the bonds of friendship, the friends begin to turn against one another. Aya fights to keep the peace, but her efforts are in vain. The Soul must try where Aya fails, not only as atonement but because a new danger lurks, threatening to devour them all.
This is over wrought blather. Be specific. What does she survive? A falling ferret? An enraged Miss Snark trampling her on the way to the gin pail? If they are face to face with death literarlly...Death is capitalized at the very least.
And "a new danger threating to devour" anything sounds like KY barking at the Squirrel Brigade in Central Park.