Can a relationship built on lies survive?
When handsome J.J. pulls up in his Jaguar, dressed like a prep, Alexandra Coulter is taken aback, but accepts that he is a temp for Movin’ Up, her moving company for small businesses. J.J. has hidden that he is actually Jacob Edward Chamberlain, Jr., a patent attorney and son of the Republican candidate for New Jersey governor. It is his office that Alex is relocating, and he has arrived in time for the move in order to retrieve unsecured trade secrets before they can be stolen, jeopardizing his practice. When a photo in the newspaper reveals J.J.’s true identity to Alex, she is furious that he lied, and that he distrusted her professional ethics. Will her attraction to him prove stronger than her desire for truth, instilled by her parents’ lies in her youth? (that sentence needs a scalpel--here use mine)
You've got the right idea on form here but it needs sharpening up.
You've also got a problem in that who cares if he lies? He toted boxes down the stairs for $10 an hour didn't he? Who cares? Not me. Alex is an idiot if she does. And "professional ethics" for a moving company? What the hell is that? That they'll arrive on time and not drop Grandmother Snark's porcelain spittoon down the stairs?
If you headline this "can a relationship built on lies survive," you need lies about something that matters. Like he's really Satan or she's really a man...good stuff.
Get some meat here. Right now this is a tofu turkey.