I’m seeking representation for my completed commercial novel, MAX AND IRIS (58,000 words).
Paris, Manhattan, Rockport and the Florida Keys of the early 1970’s provide a cinematic backdrop for the moral conflict that results when 24-year-old Iris Wingate, an aspiring writer, becomes involved with 32-year-old Max Cameron, a paid escort for well-to-do Upper East Side women.
Iris is powerfully attracted to Max, as he is to her. But for Iris it is a dangerous attraction that threatens to undermine her values and destroy her emotionally. Paul, a young musician, further complicates matters by forming an ambiguous, tension-filled alliance with the two lovers. Secrets and revelations weave a pattern of deceit that causes Iris to question Max's intentions. Psychoanalyst Al Harrison helps Iris understand the psychosexual dynamics that underlie her dependency on Max, while Miranda Paine, a sage-like woman in her seventies, shows Iris how synchronicity and fate interact to shape our lives. Max, who is as rich and complex a character as Iris, is more than just a “bad boy” lover. As Iris struggles to free herself from Max's spell, he tries to save the relationship by taking her to Paris. But in the cemeteries, cathedrals and cafes of Paris, their differences become more apparent--although their passion for each other remains intact. Finally, a truly humiliating incident for Iris involving one of Max’s clients may lead her to break free from Max's spell.
You cannot seriously use the phrase "break free from Max's spell" and expect anyone to take you seriously. It's not even cliche anymore it's so over done.
There's nothing here that is fresh and new. Or if there is, you've plastered it with blather.
Focus. Try again.