BEFORE THEY WERE SAINTS tells the unknown story of Patrick, once a wealthy Roman, now enslaved, and Brigid, a powerful goddess turned mortal. Their unrequited love affair plays out against the backdrop of fifth-century Ireland, a place where history and myth live side by side. A blend of fact and imagination, my novel depicts the humanity behind the divinity, a love story full of magic, intrigue, and desire.
Brigid, a goddess, appears to Patrick during his long years in slavery, asking him to help the ancient deities, forgotten by the people. They fall in love and Brigid knows there is only one way to be with Patrick completely to reincarnate as a mortal woman. When she disappears from his life, heartbroken Patrick escapes, only to return years later as a priest. When Brigid and Patrick meet again, their clashing visions for Ireland force them to choose their fate, or each other.
My essays and short fiction appear in small journal X, defunct journal Y, and local mag Z. The completed manuscript of BEFORE THEY WERE SAINTS is approximately 118,000 words and available for your review.
Theologically I find it very hard to believe that a man who has seen a female deity will convert to Catholicism and become a priest, but that's just me.
You're retelling a classic tale that we've seen in everything from Romeo and Juliet to City of Angels. You're going to need stellar writing to get past "been there, done that".
You've made the mistake here of giving us a flavorless rendition of events. You'd do better to pick one of the characters and show her/him with zest and energy, meeting up with the other one.