When 18 year old Zane left his crowded home to become a squire, he did not expect to find himself caught in the middle of a kidnapping plot. His first week started off uneventful enough. By the second week he had gotten himself sentenced to kitchen duty for mistakenly attacking a castle guest (really, how was he supposed to have known that that stooped man with an eye patch had been a suitor for the eldest princess?). And if that was not enough, one bossy little kitchen maid named Areli made sure his time in the kitchens was anything but pleasant.
During one particular dinner, the castle is visited by the king of Oodorians, a race that have long been at odds with the humans. The human king forcefully forbids the marriage of his eldest daughter to the beastly Oodorian prince.
She turns up missing the next day.
The Oodorians are the obvious suspects, but the evidence suggests Zane helped them do the deed. To escape capture, he flees the castle with the help of Areli and the youngest princess, Yasha.
Now Zane's only hope is to find and rescue the eldest princess before he is captured and jailed by the very knights he wanted so desperately to join.
What exactly is new here? You've got a standard fairy tale here only with SF elements. You can do this but you have to give it something distinctive, something you invent.
You're closing in on a hook but you're not focusing on the problem: Zane, sentenced to kitchen duty for being a protocol nitwit, finds himself blamed for the kidnapping of the princess. He has to clear his name or he'll be jailed and forced to listen to Florence Foster Jenkins recordings for the rest of his natural born days. Trouble is, he thinks the princess is a pain, doesn't want to rescue her and is allergic to good deeds.
Hilarity aside, you see the difference?