In Aratika’s world only the blessed first-born sons can marry and women are the possessions of their fathers or husbands. When Aratika’s father falls ill and her family can no longer afford to keep her, she is sent to a bride school and trained to be a wife. It is after she is sold she learns her future husband is already dead and she is to live with his family in his memory. To escape her father-in-law’s brutality, she dresses as a third-born son and flees to the temple to become a priest.
But the Speaker of the Sun is dying and winter storms bring famine. Aratika has two dreams that appear divine. In one her sin, a woman living in the most sacred of spaces, is the cause of the suffering; in the other their god, in the form of a great serpent, pleads for her aid.
I, Aratika is a stand alone fantasy told in the first person, complete at 95, 000 words.
This is all set up. You're missing the crucial part of the hook: the dilemma and the consequences. So she has prophetic dreams, so what? If she reveals herself does she die? If she doesn't reveal herself, does Santa retire to Ft Lauderdale?
The hook must contain a sense of urgency and at least a hint of some choice the protaganist must face or deal with.