Corporate Kahuna Rory Connolly hasn’t stuck to the facts except under duress in seventeen years. When an unprecedented attack of honesty convinces him to cut short his first-ever extramarital adventure, he fears his careless use of the truth will lead to trouble.
Treasa Connolly is a school teacher with a flair for vigilante justice. When she catches Rory trimming his nose hairs before a last-minute late-night “sales presentation,” she decides to add Fun With Scissors to her husband’s curriculum.
Rebecca Rasner, human resources specialist and ex-wife of the next Secretary of Commerce, worries that emailing her fantasies about three-way sex the morning of their first date might have given Rory the wrong idea. What she really wants is to discuss the crisis in Mogadishu and progress at the G-8 Summit.
In my mystery, RELAXING THE TRUTH, Rory’s clumsy experiments with sincerity leave both women hell bent on making him suffer. Within days he is jobless, homeless, and undergoing surgery at the hands of a motel clerk in a Napalm Death tee shirt. He’s also trying to outrun a steroid-swilling cop who keeps nursing an inferiority complex and brandishing two murder warrants with Rory’s name on them.
The harder Rory fights to prove his innocence, the guiltier he feels about everything else in his life. As he struggles to regain the respect of his wife -- legitimately this time -- Rory must prove the truth really can set him free. Too bad he doesn’t have more experience with it.
MYSTERY??? There's a mystery here? Who's dead? You're drenched in character description but there's no hint of a plot.
You've done well to avoid saying "this is a comical mystery novel" since we can see that from your writing, but it will help to know there's a plot.
You've got good form, you just messed up the landing. 8.5 from the Russian mafia judge.