When you have just graduated college and moved to a new city you might feel a little bit lost. However when you add to that a semi-stalking vampire, problems with your late father’s work which is shrouded in secrecy, some really overzealous exotic pet owners and fairy folks in your garden, you might feel lost, confused and maybe just a little bit scared. Lost is a paranormal romance novel complete at 72,000.
your hook starts here:
Athena Arc, an education student, just moved to Kansas City, MO from the small Missouri town of Secret, and it seems that a lot of things in her family were actually secrets. Estranged from her mother, who remarried far too soon after her father’s death to someone far too young, Athena is responsible for all of her father’s records from his veterinarian business. Former clients, the Reed family, come calling, and there is something not quite right about the Reeds—especially handsome and charming Blake Reed.
Then there is Aidan. Tall, pale and hot, literally, he always seems to show up whenever Athena is sad or needs help. He is no ordinary cold vamp in a frock coat. Aidan believes Athena is his ‘destiny’, and there are hints he is mixed up with the secret Arc family business.
This is a list of characters. You've alluded to conflict but it needs to be spelled out. What's the problem? What are her choices? "vamp" isn't only short for vampire by the way, particularly when the agent reading it has been known to say 23 skidoo.