As an Imperial Agent, Caprica was trained as spy, bodyguard, and assassin.
Her newest mission, assigned by the Emperor himself, wasn't like any she'd had before: present herself to the Baron on the planet Mithreal - the only known source of the mineral mallusium, which allowed the Empire the use of powerful weapons that helped keep them on even footing with the two other superpowers in their galaxy. (56 words!)
Soon after Caprica arrived on Mithreal, rumors began swirling about mallusium in the possession of the rival Cassiopean nation. Immediately suspicion falls on the Baron. Caprica's supervisor insists that she hadn't been sent to investigate any such matter, and tells Caprica to continue with the Emperor's original plan. But when a Cassiopean Ambassador contacts her to learn more about the mallusium his people already have, the original plan is trampled under raider attacks and international suspicion.
This is all backstory, and blathery at that.
Short sentences will help you focus.
You can tell by now there's no antagonist and no stakes.
Focus. Use the hook format I posted at #239 and then start again.