HH Com 280 (278)

The students of Camp Praesentia, where kids with extraordinary abilities learn to use them, welcome most newcomers enthusiastically. Haley and Kendra Malloy, however, differ from the camp's other attendees in one vital way: they're girls.

As they adjust to this new world—and it adjusts to them—they're sucked into the tense power struggle playing out at the camp. A secret group, organized by charismatic student Eli Hollsopple, plans to leave the camp and join a government agency. Haley races to uncover the

When the group kidnaps Haley's crush, she realizes that her sister has joined forces with the group. Kendra's divided allegiances place her in harm's way, even as the group's mysterious leader works to destroy all opponents.

Haley does what any sixteen-year-old with magical powers would do—she vows to save her sister. She completes her self-imposed mission, only to be left with a harrowing choice: rescue her first love, or save seventy-five innocent teachers and students.

She makes her choice, but it's not over yet. The secret group attacks, determined to crush everyone in sight. Haley and Kendra must put aside their differences, because they're the only students who can call upon the one person capable of stopping the savagery—the most
powerful student in the camp's history. (Miss Snark!!!!!!)

You're missing the key piece: what's so bad about leaving camp and joining the government? (obvious jokes aside)

There's no motivation for the bad guys being bad. I realize they're teenagers, but this is fiction, it actually has to make sense.


jamiehall said...

What's in it for the bad guys? Sure, everyone fantasizes about taking over school while destroying rivals and terrorizing teachers, but in real life non-superpowered people don't do it for those reasons alone. Criminal actions carry serious consequences. Any group engaged in kidnapping or worse would unravel from members jumping ship or betraying, unless there were a clear goal with obvious benefits. Kicks alone doesn't cut it.

Anonymous said...

So until now every other kid with these special talents has been a boy? That has a sexist feel to me.

tomdg said...

If two girls arrive in what had been an all-male environment, they won't be looked down on: the world will revolve around them. I went to a mostly-boys school and a mostly-male university, and work in a mostly-male profession, so I'm talking from experience here.

batgirl said...

The girl in an all-male setting has been done rather a lot in both fantasy and YA. I've seen a couple of editors say it's pretty much an automatic bounce in fantasy. Maybe that isn't the real focus of the book, though?
The other thing that I stumbled on was the suggestion that a kid who didn't have magical powers would let her sister go unrescued. Um, thanks, nice to know your opinion of us non-gifted types.

shannon said...

Everyone has made some really valuable comments, so I just wanted to comment on one thing that didn't make sense to me, and maybe it's a lingo thing but I don't get it: "Haley's crush" What's that? Why can't you say "Haley's sister" or, even, use her name (that's what they're there for)?