12.21.2006

HH Com 289 (288)

Death need not be the end if you live in COLUMBUS COVE. In this secluded coastal enclave in northern Florida, a mirror-still pond exists. Here, the substance of life and a human soul can be transferred from one being to another. It’s not quite the Fountain of Youth – it’s better – or is it?

Five families live in the cove with a strange cat. Years ago, one of the founding residents enlisted the neighbors to perform a ritual at the pond to preserve his son’s spirit in a kitten, based on a story he’d heard from the first settler of the wild land. The men of Columbus Cove played along – everyone simply humored old Arlen Seymour in a gesture of compassion and kindliness.

That was before one of the three Columbus Cove teenagers died. Now, the father of the dead teen needs to believe it’s really possible, and his neighbors rally around him to try the ritual again.

This magic, it turns out, doesn’t happen overnight.

The proof of the mystical transformation is revealed when a new menace threatens – an animal-rights extremists waging a private war with the newest Cove resident has cruel plans for a toddler. There’s a snafu with a kidnapping, and the ensouled animals of Columbus Cove play a large part in thwarting the evil deed. At least one resident of the Cove won’t survive the night.


Who's the main character?
Who's the toddler hater?
What's going to happen when they run across each other at the Piggly Wiggly?

You'll do well to remember that being cruel to toddlers is not much of a compelling marketing device OTHER than here at Snark Central.

You might have a good idea here but it's hard to tell from this.

4 comments:

Anonymous said...

I had to read this three times before I kind of got the gist. I like the ritual part and the feel of it, but you need to prop the father and the dead teen up there first, then get into this ritual that exists, and then follow with the trouble that's gonna cause. But as far as hooks go, it gave me a cool, creepy feeling, so I think you're not too far off.

Inkwolf said...

Pet Sematary meets Coccoon....

It could still work, of course, but you want to check those out, I think, and avoid comparisons as much as possible.

Anonymous said...

Another book where the villain is an animal-rights activist who cares about animals more than humans--especially cuddly-wuddly toddlers?

I know real, live, animal-rights activists. Nearly all of them are active in local food banks, Habitat for Humanity, Amnesty International, and other humanitarian groups as well. And--if I may snark on behalf of my friends--most of the people who paint them as villains aren't involved in such organizations.

Besides, it's such a predictable, boring cliche to use. Why not someone with, oh, say, objections to playing around with souls and bodies?

Aconite

jamiehall said...

Every time you seem to be going somewhere with a good idea, you drop that line of thought and introduce another one with an unclear connection to the last line of thought.

Try to complete your good ideas, and link the various elements together clearly. Then you'll have an exciting hook.