12.21.2006

HH Com 300

Taylor Masterson, a no-nonsense archeologist, can't wait for his latest discovery to earn much-needed funds for his overworked crew, but before he has the partial skeleton in his possession for 24 hours, a blonde bimbo with glitter wings--some sort of inept spy from his competition?--sneaks into his tent at midnight, claims she's some sort of magical being (as if!) and tries to fly off with his discovery.

Daisy le Fey, an apprentice tooth fairy, yearns to wow her superiors so that she can escape the drudgery at the Pixie Dust Factory, but her very first solo assignment turns into an unmitigated disaster when the supposedly sleeping child turns out to be a sexy (half-naked!) man who refuses to hand over the tooth.

Desperate to avoid ruining her would-be career on her first night out, Daisy has no choice but to break regulation and stay to fight for possession of the tooth. And if she uses her fledgling magical powers for unsanctioned purposes, what's a mishap here and there? So what if her wand misses Taylor's tent and turns his assistant into a pumpkin. It could happen to anyone.

Determined to unmask the beautiful liar, Taylor focuses his masculine wiles on keeping the kooky charmer in his bed and out of his archeological dig. Just because chaos erupts every time Daisy bats her lashes sure doesn't mean she's telling the truth. After all, there's no such thing as magic... right?

Ok, I take back what I said about eating cute for breakfast. I like this. It's funny, it's charming, it's vivid.

34 comments:

Anonymous said...

Disney's all over this one. Good job author. Very cool.

Virginia Miss said...

Oh, wow. If you'd told me yesterday that I'd be hooked by a romance about a tooth fairy, I'd say you were nuts. But this was so well-written, I got beyond the subject matter. Author, you're ready for your close-up. Good luck.

Anonymous said...

Yeah, I'd read this. There are so many possibilities..a toothsome idea!

Kat said...

I second the motion. I laughed straight through this one.

Kit Whitfield said...

Very entertaining-sounding; I'd certainly want to take a look. One tiny point - 'glitter wings' confused me for a moment. Maybe 'glittery' or 'glittering'?

BernardL said...

I like this hook. I don't know how far the writing could go unless it turned into a Tooth Fairy version of 'I Dream of Jeannie', but the hook is there. :)

Anonymous said...

I agreed with you about the teen vampire with the vegetarian girlfriend, but this stuff is as vivid as Crisco. Sorry.

Michele said...

Very funny and original! I'm looking forward to seeing the pages.

Inkwolf said...

Whee, another fun humorous fantasy premise! If all my favorite hooks from this event turned into equally delightful books, I'd have reading material for some time...and this would be among them.

You cracked me up with your tale of a desperate tooth fairy trying to make off with ancient teeth. What fun to wake up to! :D Best of luck publishing i!

eleora said...

I agree--this is a surprise, but I want to read it because it just sounds FUN. What's the title, I'm dying to know.

Writerious said...

Which tooth is she after -- his or the skeletons? Either way, she's a little late for the job! Interesting idea!

Sariah S. Wilson said...

I really enjoyed this hook - I love fun fantasy romances like this one. I hope an agent snaps this up soon!

Anonymous said...

:Editor stares:

I'm trying to imagine a super macho guy using the phrase "as if!" and it just isn't happening. Not even the tasty Mr. Clooney would say it, though the vision of him half or totally nekked is a nice distraction. Lose the *Valley girl* side of the dude and I might check it out.

Wabi Sabi said...

Funny, charming and vivid, yes. A great hook for a short story, but how is this slight premise, built on one situation, going to sustain us for an entire novel? Or is there more to it? I hope so.

cm allison said...

I love it, I'd read it also. Great job! (Now where's the chocolate and champagne to snuggle down with?)

Zany Mom said...

See, while this sounds interesting (hook-wise) it's just not my cup of tea. A clumsy tooth fairy bothering an archeologist? Silly.

Give me action. Give me death. Give me mayhem. Give me killers on the loose. Give me government plots. Spies. Assasins. Serial killers.

But tooth fairies?!

Guess that's why there are so many agents with so many different tastes.

Hypergraphia said...

Cute. I would defintely read into the first pages if I read this on a book jacket! Good job author.

Anonymous said...

"glitter wings" = great description

Anonymous said...

Nice idea, but why do people insist on perpetuating the 'blonde bimbo' image? That cliche is as old as ... something very old.

Ski said...

You've seemingly have combined a somewhat "adult" theme and innocence. That's pretty tough to do, and I'd bet it'll make a good read. Good Luck.

Rgds...........Ski

Anonymous said...

I agree -- this does sound interesting. However, I had a hard time getting through the first sentence (paragraph). I didn't catch on to that she was a tooth fairy immediately because of the mention of the skeleton. Did she want his tooth, or one from the skeleton?

Anonymous said...

A sexy romance involving an inept tooth fairy and a hot archaeologist? You know, normally, I wouldn't even consider reading a fantasy romance, but I've got to tell you that your hook would actually get me to open the book and read the first couple of pages. If the writing lives up to the hook, you should be able to market this.

ERiCA said...

Thanks to Miss Snark and all the commenters for your compliments and/or suggestions for my hook. I wanted to write something light and fun, but a little different than traditional romantic comedies. I appreciate all the feedback, and I hope you enjoy the first 3 pages! =)

Anonymous said...

Agreed, anonymous editor. I gakked on the "masculine wiles" phrase. I've met manly men and as a rule they don't do that sort of thing.

Overall, it's a good idea so long as only the fairy gets the Valley-speak and the guy has a macho-eye for the queer guy makeover.

My trick is to think "What would John Wayne do/wear/say?" and with some tempering for the 21st century it works well.

December Quinn said...

Add me to the "loves it" pile.

A Paperback Writer said...

It's just such a bizarre idea that I'd have to read it just to see how the author could make it work. I am amused.

dana p said...

I like how each character's (opposing) goal is so clearly expressed. It's not my genre, but I appreciate the quality of the writing and the deftness of the humor. I wouldn't be able to resist reading a page or two or more, in spite of myself...

Great job, author!

I agree that "glittering wings" would read more smoothly than "glitter wings."

heidi said...

Plot setting: there's a mcguffin two characters desperately need.

Conflict: they both can't have it.

Twist: she's a tooth fairy.

Success element: it's well-written.

Works for me. If I read this on the back cover, I'd pick up the book.

I like light-hearted stuff like this.

batgirl said...

I had no problem with the Tooth Fairy. None. But my suspension of disbelief went twaannnnggg at the idea of archaeology as a cut-throat competitive business. What, they're after his grant that doesn't cover food and laundry?

alisa said...

this is great. totally hilarious. i wanna read it!

Inkwolf said...

I'm with those who stand up for 'glitter wings' as it gave me an immediate image of paper wings with glitter glued to them, which view seems to fit the POV best.

Glittering wings is another picture altogether.

Anonymous said...

This sounds as though it could be quite funny, but how does a "discovery ... earn much-needed funds for [the archaeologist's] overworked crew"? Archaeology doesn't work that way. Site-looting does, and so might salvage work (including legal but unethical excavation of shipwreck sites in certain waters), but not proper archaeology.

MWT said...

Regarding the tooth earning much-needed funds. Yes, actually it can make sense the way it's written.

In science, future funding comes from past track record. Maybe the archaeologist desperately needs the tooth as the evidence for something-or-other theory he's trying to show, so he can publish some good strong papers, and thereby garner more grant funds to continue the dig.

If the work crew consists of his graduate students, research assistants and techs, that are paid out of those grant funds, then yes, they would need those funds for continuing their research projects (students) or basic living expenses (RAs/techs).

I'm curious how all this ends, myself. ;)

pws said...

Maybe it's just me, but by the time I got to the end of the first sentence, complete with two hyphenated words, double dashes and parenthesis, I quit reading. Then I read the comments, re-read the post, and wish I'd stopped where I originally did.
It doesn't sound like a novel.