12.22.2006

HH Com 304

AUCTIONING ANNA is the first novel about dating services that charge exorbitant amounts – unless you’re female. Anna (aka Adrianna) is sucked into this comical world. Imagine BERGFORF BLONDES with deeper highlights. (your hook starts here) Optimistic but naïve, Anna’s an aspiring actress who needs a backbone – now. Her father tears her heart apart and her boyfriend tramples on the remains, so she goes for the gold: millionaires in their golden years. Bob, with his aging Pro-Bowl biceps, makes her fancy a life without waiting tables, but is it No Strings or G-strings? When the media mistakes her for an escort, her life shatters in humorous ways. She feels like Monica Lewinsky locked in a revolving closet of blue dresses…until notoriety saves her life.

Here's the starting point:
X is the main guy;
Y is the bad guy;
they meet at Z and all L breaks loose.
If they don't solve Q, then R starts and if they do it's Lsquared.


From that make changes and adjustments to reflect your story and your style. A good solid hook needs all of those elements.

6 comments:

Michele said...

I loved the tone, and liked the part of the hook from where Miss Snark indicates it starts through "G-Strings".

Perhaps instead of going into the general media stuff you can go into specifics? Is there someone out to get her? Will she have second thoughts?

~Nancy said...

Imagine BERGFORF BLONDES with deeper highlights.

Nitpicky - it's BERGDORF

Optimistic but naïve, Anna’s an aspiring actress who needs a backbone – now.

Why does she need a backbone now? Is Daddy Warbucks about to cut off her allowance or out of his will?

Or maybe I'm misunderstanding the entire set up here.

~JerseyGirl

wavybrains said...

As an idea, I liked this--I'd prefer to see more redeeming characters, but baring that, a good skewering of irreedemble characters in a social satire is always interesting.

Anonymous said...

Just a thought - I'd be wary of saying "the first novel about..."

It's possible the agent has read books that you don't know exist. Dating services that charge gullible men only are certainly not a new idea. (Doesn't have to be new to make a great book, it's how you handle it that counts.)

aries said...

If it's true that the chick lit trend is dead then this novel is in real trouble.

Virginia Miss said...

I immediately thought of Susan Elizabeth Phillips' "Match me if you can" - so I agree with a previous commentor: do NOT say "the first novel about dating services that charge exorbitant amounts - unless you're female." One of the dating agencies in Phillips' novel only took male clients...