Waterbury Rising is a completed 120,000 word YA fantasy/mystery novel.
It isn't easy being a kid in a tiny, boring, farmtown. Especially if you're an orphaned kid whose only guardian is an adopted older brother, moved in from over the mountains where all of the magic and adventure is happening. But once a teacher is murdered, Paul and his "outsider" brother, Bryan, become prime suspects in a small town that's all too happy to hang anything and anyone that threatens its traditional way of life. Maybe life was better off boring.
(your hook starts here)
Paul knows he didn't do it. He's pretty sure Dani Archer and Liam Linnwood, his best friends, aren't murderers. And Paul would really like to believe that Bryan would never hurt anyone, even if some people in Waterbury think he was responsible for the death of his
fiancé the same night Paul's parents died eight years ago.
Pursued all the while by Constable Shedwick Chambers, the law in Waterbury, Paul and his friends weave their way through the mysteries of a small town where not everything is as it seems. As the clues multiply and suspicions rise, the reader learns of Bryan's doomed love: Caitlyn Tucker, daughter of one of the most affluent farmers in town, of the magic and war taking place over the mountains, and why after eight quiet years people are dying again in little Waterbury.
The form is pretty good here, but it's too distant to be compelling. Start witht "Paul knows he didn't murder the teacher" and build from there.