12.15.2006

HH Com 34

In Search of Prey is an adventure that carries the reader through the heart of the Amazon. (Cardio pulmonary fiction?)

Your hook starts here
Sean Watts' life is just the way he wants it: minimal responsibilities and a job that appeases his wanderlust. He's a tour guide on the Rio Negro and hardly a novice jungle adventurer. When he's asked by Adelia Harkness, director of the Harkness Institute, to lead an expedition in search of a group of missing scientists, he doesn't think beyond the extra cash.

A World Health Organization physician, an American telecommunications specialist, and an indigenous tribesman are just a few members of his team. At first, there's no reason to consider the varied background of this unusual search party, but when they become hunted, it's obvious they were brought together for a purpose. One by one, they are being picked off, either to disappear into the darkness or to have their butchered remains left to taunt the survivors.
(I think the Governor of California will be interested in this idea)

Finally, Sean is forced to confront the fact that Adelia has an agenda in this mission, and it goes beyond finding missing scientists. She has a plan to change the future of the rainforest and, thus, the world.

(lose this)
While Sean and the others race to escape the danger of the jungle, forces are at work inside the institute that threaten to topple man's long-held position at the top of the food chain.


I know there are only six plots in the world but it's your job as a writer to bring something fresh and new to the page even if you're using a plot I recognize. And I'm not sure why you think people are at the top of the food chain. Lions think they are. Elephants too I bet.

14 comments:

Anonymous said...

I thought it was 7 known plots. And Shakespeare told all of them.

Rashenbo said...

Hehhe, well... I completely bungled that hook, didn't I. Another one of those times when you think you are describing the basics of your plot... and end up misdirecting it.

Ah well, :) better luck next time. I appreciate the comments. It's always interesting to see what Miss Snark will come back with.

Wonderwood said...

Take heart, author, this is a tough excercise. A reality check can be brutal, but if you pick up some useful information, it's worth the pain. Easy for me to say, I haven't been slaughtered yet, and I fully expect my humiliation to be complete LOL. Take her advice and use it wisely. Good luck!

Anonymous said...

I found the premise of the story quite fascinating. Good luck with it!

HawkOwl said...

Actually, leading any kind of remote expedition is a huge responsibility. Flush.

Bill Peschel said...

No, you didn't bungle it. You just need to rethink it for the new century. How would it change today? Great White Hunter more ecologically sensitive? More willing to work with native tribesmen? I don't know, but I'll bet if some research was done, a fresh angle would appear.

Anonymous said...

Don't you let Miss Snark fool you. There are more than six plots in this world and she knows it. She's evil and her dog too. :P

December Quinn said...

I think it sounds interesting, but yeah, you need to make clear how it differs both from Predator and from Deliverance (I'm sure the lack of anal rape is a big difference, but the "campers pitted against lurkers in the woods" isn't.)

Calamity Jane said...

Here's a nitpicky suggestion for you: lose the name Adelia. It's unfamiliar and literally pulled me right out the hook as I had to stop, go back, and read it again to make sure I had it right. Unfamiliar names for a first time author are risky business.

Anonymous said...

They're all wrong. Sharks are at the top.

Rashenbo said...

Lol! :) Yeah, but how many times has Jaws been done! :) I was writing my hook knowing what my plot was about and I was trying to be clever in the way I described it. What I ended up doing was making it sound like something it's not. Other than being in the jungle and other than characters trying to survive... that's where the similarity ends. The plot focuses on conservation and selective breeding of endangered species within the rain forest. But, it was valuable because now I can see how someone not familiar with my plot would associate this particular description. It tells me I didn't do it right. So, now I can rework it and focus better on the intricacies of my plot that do make it different.

Cheers!

luna_the_cat said...

No way -- ask any biologist. What's at the top of the food chain is bacteria.

Seriously. Think about it.

Sharks? Not so much. We eat sharks. Humans are not endangered because of sharks. But most shark species are endangered because of humans. If the sharks get a lick in at an individual human now and again, it doesn't even begin to level the playing field.

Same with leopards, tigers, alligators........

Nope. Top of the food chain? The stuff that eats *everything*. Bacteria.

Anyway, I would probably pick up the book and leaf through it to see what you've done with the plot. No guarantee that I'd buy it, but I would pick it up to have a look.

Anonymous said...

I'm in, when do I get to pick up my copy?

Miss Fiddyment said...

I know I am too late to the party here, but the title of this book is Dart of Harkness