Appetite For Beauty is a 55,000-word Young Adult novel about an "it" girl’s tragic battle with bulimia, told from the view of her younger sister.
Loann Rochester is living in the shadow of her sister. Claire is an accomplished ballerina, beauty queen, and cheerleader. Loann is Claire’s self-critical younger sibling, a loveable loser, whose attempts to emulate Claire include altering her appearance, changing her friends, and seeking a sexual encounter with Claire’s boyfriend.
By accident, Loann discovers a natural talent for photography. Through her camera lens, she finds some unexpected truths from the world around her. Her dad’s a womanizing workaholic, her mom, in her effort to keep up with appearances, is losing touch with reality, and her sister, Claire, is being overtaken by a severe eating disorder.
Loann befriends Marcus, a loner at school struggling with his sexuality, and he becomes her silent strength. Loann convinces Claire to fight for her life, but her heart is too weak for the struggle. It is only after Claire completely succumbs to her illness, that Loann’s own strength and normalcy unfolds.
You've got too many people in this very crowded paragraph. Her parents are out of touch-doesn't matter why. She discovers photography...and how does the photography relate to discovering things?
And ditch allmention of Marcus. Follow the template and figure out what this story is about.
I think bulimia/anorexia/eating disorders have been done to death as well. Unless you have something new and fresh to say about it you're not going to hook me with that topic.