12.16.2006

HH Com 35

A single phone call has librarian Elsie Leabeck packing up her horse, cat, and gardening gloves and moving to Florida. Her mama’s sick and that’s all she needs to know. But Mama’s just exaggerating as usual: her health is great, she has tons of friends, and her social life is hotter than Elsie’s. Elsie should be angry but she’s loving the Florida lifestyle—trail riding through Palmetto Park, joining Mama’s community garden group Peas on Earth, and…finding a dead body under the bougainvilleas? The police say it was a natural death, but Mama says the wealthy woman was murdered. Elsie believes Mama’s just telling stories again until Mama’s clunked over the head by a mysterious intruder. That does it! No way is some lowlife scum (and possible murderer) getting away with giving Elsie’s mama a huge headache. But are Elsie’s professional research skills, a horse, a cat, and a whole bunch of Peas enough to catch a murderer?

Bingo.

16 comments:

Rei said...

Well written.

M. G. Tarquini said...

I like this one.

Anonymous said...

Oh man, I hope when mine comes around I don't get my head bitten off...*cowers*

A Paperback Writer said...

Hey! Now THIS one I like, too! Wow. Maybe I'm not as far off as I thought.
Hey, there, author person, can you finish this one up soon? I want to see how it ends.

Writerious said...

I want to read this when it gets published. This is my favorite kind of mystery.

HawkOwl said...

Whatever. If Mama's exaggerating "as usual," Elsie would no that and not drop everything for her. Also, this sounds like an Amelia Pettipants mystery meets the Stepford Wives. Flush.

And again, it's too bad we're not getting more snarkommentary on the winning hooks.

Inkwolf said...

I'm only a library worker...but if MY momma got me to quit my job and move to another state on the pretense of being ill, I can tell you who the murder victim would be!

On the other hand, maybe Elsie has a less loveable board and director than my library...

Bill Peschel said...

Very, very nice. There's a guy named Sampiro over at the Straight Dope Bulletin Board who's been telling stories about his Alabama mom and the rest of his crazy family (God rest her soul), so I'd be primed for this book.

Effective hook.

Anonymous said...

Reading this made my Hook seem more like crap.

Xiqay said...

I loved this.

And I'm so glad Miss Snark did, too. (Otherwise, I'd have to question my sanity--again.)

Anonymous said...

Cute. Not what I'd usually read, but I can see the potential for humor.

Mtanz said...

I liked it a lot. I'd definitely pick it up. Good voice.

skybluepinkrose said...

Well done! I love Peas on Earth. I'll definitely read this.

But I, too, got stuck at "exaggerating as usual." Elsie knows this, and she'd change her entire life on one phone call? You have to make me believe this -- convince me that Elsie is certain Mama's robust health has to falter any day now, and just because Mama keeps crying wolf, E doesn't want to be just a heartless villager. Set it up in their backstory why Elsie will run anytime Mama calls, even though she knows better. And if she's going to uproot her whole life this time, it would help if there's something in it that she really doesn't mind escaping. Or she feels she's never been adventurous and now she's going to do something reckless, etc.

Virginia Miss said...

Nice job, author!
I agree with cutting "as usual" after exaggerating.
Good luck

jb said...

Is it just me, or do Librarians seem to be getting a lot of action in these hooks? Nothing wrong with that, better than writers having the adventures, I suppose. Just kinda funny.

Anonymous said...

Yes, the hook works, but the concept turns me off. Even setting aside my knee-jerk distaste for cozy mysteries with cutesy names, it's not clear to me what is supposed to distinguish this mystery from the hundreds of other cozies out there.