It's tough to be a princess waiting for true love when your Prince Charming is trying to kill you, your best friend has discovered the secret to the most forbidden of magics, and your fairy godmother neglected to leave you any sensible shoes.
Princess Alysia (Aly to friends) waits, not very patiently, in a distant tower for her true love. When he tries to kill her instead of kiss her, she escapes and makes her way back to her kingdom, Adelai, to reclaim her life. In the meantime, her cousin and best friend, Risse, has discovered how to use magic, a taboo going back to the beginning of civilization. As Risse learns to control magic and, for the first time, understands the allure of power, another sort of magic grips her: love for the prince of a nearby rival country. And in order to keep her magic and marry her prince, she must usurp Aly's rightful place.
"The Frog Princes of Adelai" follows Aly and Risse as they struggle with the choices between good and evil, loyalty and betrayal, good wine and bad shoes. Their choices eventually bring them face-to-face in the middle of a war when what they each decide about how much the
other is worth will determine whether Adelai falls and whether magic lives on or is buried forever.
Why why why does every princess story have to have these crazy ass names?? Alysia of Adelai? Please, give me something normal like Gertrude of Bloomingdales.
You've got the fun start of an idea here but then it devolves into the usual. Why should we care if magic lives on or is buried forever? More focus on the conflict with Risse will help too.