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Political candidates wanted: ambition and ego required; integrity optional. John “Pepper” Papparelli hangs his consulting shingle in the city of Grand River and finds himself inundated by his clients’ indiscretions, crimes and just plain stupidity as he guides three campaigns towards Election Day.

“All Politics is Local” follows Pepper in his foray into public affairs. If he wins, he opens the door to bigger and more lucrative campaigns. The wisecracking, low-key Pepper clashes with a cast of egocentric office seekers and their flunkies during the aptly named “silly season.” He survives, succeeds and is poised to achieve his goals, only to face a new dilemma that forces him to weigh his ambitions against his personal ethics.

Pepper’s candidates think big, but their actions show why they remain small-time:

Bumbling Bob George wants to be mayor, but his laughable judgment, penchant for malaprops (That’s the last Sebastian!) and a committee of wanna-be politicos consistently frustrate his intentions.

Council hopeful Val Lopez is secretive and controlling. With his deep-pocketed associates he disregards campaign ethics to wage war against his opponent.

Richard Reimer has AIDS. He faces a death sentence and decides to unburden his soul by doing something unheard of in politics – reveal the truth – about himself and his corrupt opponents in the election.

Pepper also becomes involved with two women, the apolitical Sharon O’Malley and the mysterious Rachel Wellington. While he educates them about the inner workings of politics, they help him learn more about himself.

This isn't a hook, it's a list of characters.
And why would anyone read this. We have the New York Times for all the hilarity about politicos we need.


BernardL said...

Keep the first two paragraphs and start sending it out. It's a winner. I'm already picturing that Clinton snake James Carvel setting up shop for the first time in some burg. :)

Anonymous said...

Okay, so, like a crooked lawyer, he helped some men that probably didn't desrve his talent. That's when the plot gets hot and heavy IMO and you don't let the agent know what that is. What is the decision that this revelation that he's helping the wrong guys going to force him to decide? What's preventing him from seeing the right? That's when this thing gets intersting, and that's what you'll have to include in a hook IMO.

LindaBudz said...

"He survives, succeeds and is poised to achieve his goals, only to face a new dilemma that forces him to weigh his ambitions against his personal ethics."

When I got to this sentence, I thought, OK, great, now we're getting to the point of this story ... but then you didn't follow through. What's the new dilemma?!?

I like the premise, cuz I love local politics, but I need more meat in this hook to make me want to read the book.

Good luck with it!

Anonymous said...

"All Politics is Local" was a big jolt.

Anonymous said...

OK, so bernardl is a repub who detests Carville (or ice cream, not sure which), and I'm a huge, honkin' liberal... which of us is it gonna make wet our pants, or is it supposed to crack us both up equally for different reasons, like Christopher Buckley?

I'd read this, I think; I love political satire (again, like Buckley's). But I got stuck on this line (which you'll delete anyway, according to Miss Snark): "penchant for malaprops (That’s the last Sebastian!)"

I'm well-read, and I didn't get the malaprop there. If you have one minute to hook an agent, use one that will get through in 10 seconds or less. Save any in-jokes for inside the novel, when we're in your head.