Most Glendtish girls dream of being empress, of hair decorated with jewels, and of divinely given power. Dylanna Lyn dreams of piracy and revolution. (Miss Snark's kind of girl).
She doesn’t know that in five hundred years historians will study her, priests and priestesses will revere her, and skeptics will doubt her existence. All Dylanna knows is that she wants out of Glendt fast before she’s forced into prostitution or her heretical beliefs land her in jail. And to get out, she needs to steal a ship or seduce a sailor. Preferably both. EYES OF THE OCEAN is her story.
You've got the main character and her motivation. I like them both.
You're missing all the rest. I'd send this back in that dreaded SASE cause I need to know the rest before I want to read things.