Where can you find a dock for your iPod in 1517 Urbino, Italy? The day before Alana Merriman has to submit her Humanities term paper on Castiglione's The Book of the Courtier, she wakes up in a Renaissance city-state. As a courtier in the court of Urbino, Alana must negotiate its precarious social environment (and figure out why she's suddenly proficient in Italian). After sitting for a portrait, Alana begins to fall for one of the court's talented young painters. Enjoying festivals, learning to play the mandolin, and finding herself embroiled in philosophical debates, Alana becomes an authentic courtier in her own right. But soon the placid world of Urbino's court is questioned as its delicate alliances have drawn the city-state into a costly and treacherous war. How will Urbino, populated by artists and humanists, respond to the threat? Where will Urbino's decision leave Alana?
The Book of the Hipster Turned Courtier is a 55,000-word YA novel.
Clever, fun idea and one I'd want to read.
You're missing specifics on most of the elements of the hook that I'd want to see.
Use the starting point for creating a hook and start again.
This could be fun.
Starting point for creating a hook:
X is the main guy; he wants to do:
Y is the bad guy; he wants to do:
they meet at Z and all L breaks loose.
If they don't resolve Q, then R starts and if they do it's L squared.