What's a girl to do when a menacing black dog that only she can see reveals itself right before it near fatally attacks her? She gets herself stranded in a town harboring even darker secrets then the ones she's hiding.
In Macmalion (population unknown and dropping), people regularly go missing; sometimes disappearing entirely, sometimes turning up dead – only to disappear again. Quiet rumors of posthumous sightings add to the mystery that unfolds with each day Elsie spends in the strange town. With the help of a co-worker who knows more then she's letting on and a man facing his own supernatural dilemmas, Elsie begins to unravel Macmalion's secrets. What she discovers will not only connect to the night she held a dying man in her arms but also provide her with the answers she's spent the past two years looking for. The only catch is that the answers come with a hefty price: her mortal soul.
This is a great line: In Macmalion (population unknown and dropping).
the rest isn't.
Start with Elsie. Focus on her problem. Build from there. Be specific.