12.26.2006

HH Com 469

Amber Riley is the pugnacious lawyer male clients hire to make them look like they're progressive enough to hire a woman - when they'd really rather not. Roberto Cerisano, facing charges of sexual harassment, is a case in point. He's sleazy, but smart enough to have covered his tracks well enough - and that's what counts. Because Amber likes to win.

She also likes Thursday afternoon sex with her married boyfriend, well-aged single-malt scotch, and the sleek lines of her penthouse condominium. It's the teddy bears - stuffed dogs - and even a sequined unicorn in her closet that bother her.

When she consults a professional about her "shopping problem," she expects to blame her mother - not wake up weeks later to find her condo transformed into a new age nightmare of crystals and badly silk-screened dreamscapes, and herself on the verge of being disbarred.

A confrontation with her therapist sets Amber on a voyage of self-discovery - but only because she has to get it together to find out what the hell has happened to her career, her Eames couch, and how Roberto's taste for young interns relates to the FBI trailing her car.


I know just how she feels. I started out reading what looked like a legal thriller and ended up with Amber Does Sedona.

Don't start a hook with a description of the character; start with a pivotal point in the plot. Amber wakes up in Dharma and Greg's spare bedroom and then....

5 comments:

Inkwolf said...

This does sound intriguing, though!

dana p said...

I have to admit, I would really like to know more. It sounds off-beat in a irresistably WTF way.

writtenwyrdd said...

One of my many jobs was working for a woman attorney who dressed and acted incredibly slutty and had the worst bleach blonde hair. She even boasted to me of having worked her way through college as a...masseuse.

So, that's how I picture your character, but with Kathleen Turner acting the part.

Sounds intriguing, but I am not sure from this blurb what the plot actually is.

Minnie Bittertiddoff said...

"So, that's how I picture your character, but with Kathleen Turner acting the part."

Kathleen Turner maybe twenty years ago...Have you seen her lately. Oy

xiqay said...

Don't start a hook with a description of the character; start with a pivotal point in the plot.

Really? I liked the opening of this-with both Amber and Roberto. But paragraph 2 doesn't continue the story of paragraph 1 and, as MS says, what starts as a legal thriller and transforms (I want to say degenerates) into something else.

FWIW-Shopping is only a problem if you can't afford it. Sounds like Amber commands a hefty price, and teddy bears, stuffed dogs and sequined unicorns just aren't going to cost enough to put her in financial jeopardy. She can afford to collect stuff. Gambling-that could cause problems. Drugs, too.

And "voyage of self-discovery" is another one of those phrases Miss Snark should outlaw. (Perhaps she already has?)

I guess I liked where you started, but didn't like where you went with this story. jmho.

Good luck