12.16.2006

HH Com 49

When an accused embezzler confronts his feisty, mind-reading jury consultant with a secret international plot to destroy the global economy, she risks everything to stop it.

(your hook starts here)
Jury consultant Sylvia Strathclyde reads minds for a living. No one suspects the real reason behind this twenty-six-year-old's amazing success at picking the right jurors for each client. Descended from a long line of mind-readers, who’ve survived the ages by disguising and limiting their rare and frightening talent, Sylvia hides in plain sight.

Disgusted by her mentor--who worships money, not justice--she strikes out on her own, vowing to defend only the innocent. There aren’t many, at least not who can afford a jury consultant. With the rent overdue and her credit cards maxed to the limit, she interviews one last well-heeled defendant. Failure means slinking back home to her carnival fortuneteller grandmother.

But Keith Milikowski, an unorthodox attorney accused of embezzling millions from a high-profile corporate client, won't let Sylvia into his mind. Unable to verify Keith's innocence and because nobody--not one person--has ever shut her out, Sylvia takes the case.

As they select a jury, Keith grows to trust Sylvia. She's not so sure about him. How can she trust a man she can't read? Finally letting down his guard, Keith reveals his own hidden talent, and a conspiracy so vast it threatens not only his life, but the entire world economy.


Interesting premise, then you get bogged down in a blather of stuff that is the imitation of a plot.

This is gussied up chick lit, so suddenly imperiling the entire world's economy is not only out of left field, it defies the imagination. Unless he has the ability to suck up all the water and/or oil in the world...

Focus. Don't be afraid to just make it a fun book.

9 comments:

Anonymous said...

The show "Medium" features a psychic as a jury consultant, so this isn't new.

Anonymous said...

This one got me. I'd want to see more. But then WTHDIK.

Anonymous said...

I disagree with Miss Snark some. I'd read this as is -- I'd like to see something more weighted (conspiracy theory, etc.) with chick lit instead of it being pure "fun." However, I can see from a marketable perspective how that may be difficult.

Xiqay said...

I love the premise of a jury consultant who can read minds!

Christina said...

I agree with xiqay, but I also agree with what Miss Snark said about going off onto other things unneccesarily.

Virginia Miss said...

This hooked me.

Maybe the author needs to tone down the last line. Cut "so vast" and replace "entire world economy"

Good luck

luna_the_cat said...

Yanno, not every book actually has to involve Saving The World. The focus can be smaller, and the book better for it. Choose what scale you want to work on.

tomdg said...

I like this one, even though fantasy isn't really my thing. Two issues with it though: (1) Jury Consultant. There must be loads of better ways to use a mind-reading skill than that. How much would it even help, given that the jurors themselves don't know what they're going to decide until after the trial. (2) is there a connection between the reason she can't read this guy's mind and the plot to destroy the global economy?

I don't like coincidences in a plot. If she can read minds but not this guy's, then everything else in the plot has to come from that. But I very much like the basic idea.

thraesja said...

I liked this one too, although I may have misread it as a paranormal drama rather than chick lit or fantasy.