Angel Fiore and her husband Nick are surprised to find the nude body of a young prostitute in an upscale neighborhood. Both are stunned when their son arrests Lucky Loveland, Nick's best friend, in connection with the woman's murder.
Lucky has bedeviled Angel ever since she was a teenager. So why does she feel responsible for clearing Lucky's name now, almost forty years later? Angel has held Lucky responsible for many misdeeds over the years, but she is certain he is no murderer. Of course, forty-eight hours ago she would have sworn he wasn't the type to visit a prostitute, either.
Armed with surprising information supplied by the abbess at a local monastery, Angel intends to prove Lucky innocent. Even if that means unearthing long-buried secrets, and coming to terms with Lucky's unrequited love for her. Unfortunately, Angel doesn't realize that she is being watched, or that by unmasking a killer, she is placing her son in mortal danger.
I would be very pleased if you would consider representing my completed 73,000-word traditional mystery, For the Love of Angel. Thank you for your time and consideration.
This isn't a hook, it's a plot description.
The first two paragraphs are good, but you need one more, in that vein to finish the arc.
Your motivation is sketchy at best, and you're only hinting at the true stakes of the game in the very last sentence. That needs to be much more developed and brought out earlier.