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Nineteen years ago, a baby’s unexpected arrival ended Catherine Gannon’s relationship with her first love, Richard Finch. Now, years of longing, secrecy and even anger are being transformed into an obsessive desire to seduce Richard’s teenage son. (who the f is Richard?)

Jack -- the baby that once tore them apart -- has become a beautiful teenager and the spitting image of his father. Seducing him begins as memoriam to lost love, and soon mixes with chemical desire, maternal perversion and a need for revenge, as Catherine plans not only to win Jack’s trust and romantic interest, but to document and reveal his family’s ongoing secrets once the erotic betrayal is complete.

NOTES TO MY LOVER'S SON is set against a backdrop of art and photography, in Los Angeles and London, at art schools, galleries and a dead collector’s Belgravia mansion. In the end, Laura must confront questions with no easy answers: Must great love always end catastrophically? Are her own ideals of unconditional love, familial sacrifice and emotional fidelity letting her down? And will reliving the past finally free Laura from it, or lead to something even darker?

Who the f is Laura?

This is a mess.


dancinghorse said...

As far as I can tell from the very confused and confusing text, this is Oedipus modernized, except Jocasta knows the kid is hers and has it in for his father (which makes it even uglier).

Mother-son incest is pretty far out there. Is this really what you're writing about?

Virginia Miss said...

I didn't see this as incest, exactly -- I thought Jack wasn't Catherine's (?Laura's?) son, but that richard fathered a baby with a different woman.
Now that I got back and read it, it doesn't say that, either.

xiqay said...

I thought the baby was Catherine's and that's how her relationship with Richard gets sunk. And that made me think it wasn't Richard's baby (because then he'd be tied to her for the child's lifetime--maybe not as boyfriend, but as the child's father and legally bound to support the child).

Then I thought the baby was Richard's by another woman.

Then I got to "maternal perversion" and I was confused, back to Catherine as mother.

But she wants to win Jack's trust, so that makes it seem like he's not connected to her.

And then we have Laura? Is that Catherine's old name before the author changed it? Or is that the mother of Jack?

Nothing in this query made me want to read it. Sorry.

Kim said...

A heroine who's a pedophile? Yuck. I don't care if the kid's nineteen, it still gives me the heebie-jeebies.

I'll take a pass, thank you very much. Too much skin-crawling here.

Anonymous said...

I'll take multiple-choice answer D here: All of the above.

Dear author: Any time you say that "A baby drove apart lady X and guy Y" you have to understand that most readers will automatically assume that baby was created by X and Y. Be clear in the first sentence as to who's baby came between them, please, and that will help avoid all of this "her attractive son is now her revenge against her ex-lover the dad" business.

ObiDonWan said...

Booze in almost any quantity is not good for you.

Anonymous said...

"NOTES TO MY LOVER'S SON" I love this title...LOL! I am going to revise my Will and add this in.

Dear Author, keep the title.

Bella Stander said...

Though even the Washington Post uses the phrase, "spitting image" is incorrect. It is "spit and image"; or in the vernacular, "spit 'n' image."

Bonnie Calhoun said...

LOL...I'm with Miss Snark....and I shouldn't even talk like that....but who is Laura? Amd is Catherine having an incestuous relationship with her son...euhhh!

Kiskadee said...

I assumed fromn the first sentence that the baby was theirs and he left her because of it. Reading on, and thinking about it, it seems the baby is R's with another woman and grew up to be Jack.
Very confusing, especially with the introduction of Laura.

Anonymous said...

I'm getting the impression that the Catherine/Laura is seducing Richard's son by another woman to get back at Richard, and that 'maternal' means 'quasi-motherly feelings' rather than 'actually his mother'. But it took some figuring out. Assuming that's the story, it's a good strong premise, so what's needed here is less general references (from the second sentence of paragraph two onwards, we get mostly generalities, which are less exciting than events). Say clearly what happens, and you may well get people's attention. And bear in mind that when you're talking about sexual situations, double entendres and unclear sentences lie like bear traps on your path. You need to be absolutely sure there's only one way to read every sentence you write.

Anonymous said...

Mmmm. A whole book about a revolting woman trying to seduce a young boy for revenge.

Personally, I think she sounds like one of the most--if not the most--disgusting excuses for a human being I've ever heard of.

The writing would have to be brilliant to make a character like this work. This writing doesn't look brilliant at all.

The Gambino Crime Family said...

The kid's nineteen and I assume the woman's, what, forty? We're not exactly not in shock-horror-land here (unless she's the Mum, than we are).

Really, fair's fair. If tubby 40-year-old men get to fool around with their PAs, than women get to spend quality time with the lawn boy.

Anonymous said...

Since when did fancying a 19-year-old make you a pedophile?

Anonymous said...

My guess is the writer made a mistake typing "Laura" (perhaps an earlier name choice for "Catherine"). The hook needs some work but I found the story intriguing. I read it this way: a woman who lost her first love because he had a baby with another woman now plans on seducing the son. If it's well-written, it could be good.

I don't know the writer but wanted him/her not to feel this was hopeless. Take the time to clean this up and make sure your ms is also clear.