12.29.2006

HH Com 600 (!!!!!!!!!!!---home stretch!)

The new law has turned the King's army from a ragtag collection of feudal contingents and mercenary companies into a professional force, but it has also sidelined many men-at-arms from their preferred line of work. For the lucky like Sir Eugene de Brie, this retirement could mean a job as the steward of a royal castle, a modest stipend, and a comfortable if boring life in an out-of-the way corner of the royal domains. But his quiet little world is shaken when Armand, his former squire, arrives with proof that a crime has been committed within his jurisdiction -- with the aid of black magic.

Navigating the maze of the newfangled bureaucracy and tangling with the ancient customs of the College of Heralds, they uncover clues that point to the involvement of Crown Prince Philippe. The impenitent prince, having fallen into royal disfavor after his failed attempt at rebellion only a few years before, has set up another plot to wrest the throne from his
ageing father. Eugene and Armand must stop the Philippards before they can plunge the war-weary land into another episode of bloodbath.

Weed out all the extras. Start with Sir Eugene and Armand. Then the problem. For inspiration look at this.

8 comments:

Virginia Miss said...

Is the main conflict solving a black magic crime or preventing a war?

Anonymous said...

I'd check this one out if only because there is a hint the writer actually did some research about living back in the day. Or knight.

A Paperback Writer said...

I kind of like this, though. Sure it's a little confusing at the moment, but I think there's hope.

BuffySquirrel said...

Oooooh, thanks for the heads-up on the exhibition, Miss Snark. I can't go, but I can buy the catalogue! 6-10 weeks for delivery, bummer.

Lee said...

I see a lot of problems with this story. It just might be me, but I don’t see a ragtag army of disgruntled mercenaries suddenly shaping up into a professional fighting force. Highly unlikely, considering most armies back in the day were made up of mercenaries, and they weren’t very professional about raping and pillaging. Unless you want to bring in work ethics.

Don’t see any luck with Sir Eugene, either. What was it he did before? Was he too a professional barbarian?

I’m assuming this little war, and coming events is somehow in England, or could it be France, with King Phillip the Fair. Now there was a real charmer. Let’s get back on track and address Armand. A former squire? So that means he must be a knight now, because that was the promotion from squire. The next step was knighthood. So he’d be Sir Armand? Maybe he got shipped off to another knight to serve because he couldn’t cut the grade with Eugene? So there really aren’t any former squires. If there were, they had left service in disgrace, or were killed in battle fighting along side their Lord somebody. Rarely a Sir anybody, they didn’t have the money, to provide equipement to keep said squire in one piece.

Over all, I don’t like this story. Can you tell? I don’t think they did their research. Its vague, and I want to know what country it takes place, even a made up one. And that Armand wasn’t a former squire. And who is the bad guy in this, besides the Phillippe guy. Where did the black magic come from? Who created it? Its mentioned but that's all.

Lee said...

I disagree with the research, its way off. Mercernaries never became professional. To restrictive, and didn't pay well or at all.
What did Sir Eugene do before this all came about?
And as for Armand, there are no former squires. The pormotion for squires is knighthood. Unless he left his knight's service in disgrace. And Sir's didn't have squires, because they couldn't afford them. Only Lord's did. More money, and usually the squire was a friend's son who had been fostering with him for many years.
And the black magic. Who produced it and why?

dancinghorse said...

Umm, lee, mercenaries are by definition professional (= did it for a living) soldiers. The alternative at the time would be local levies, who were basically amateurs. I.e. cannon fodder.

Author, go thou and read Marc Bloch. He's as dry as old bones, but he'll teach you a Lot about the feudal system.

Yes, even if this is a made-up world. It's medieval-zoid if so and requires just as much research as any other form of historical.

Sigh about the exhibition, she said from 2500 miles away.

Bernita said...

Thought that mercenary companies were professionals.
In fact, the most professional of the lot.
Like the Swiss reislaufer.