12.29.2006

HH Com 619

Almost eighteen, bubbly Gracie Dawson is happy working in the office of her father’s factory during the week and dressing up as “The Other Gracie” to perform Gracie Fields’ songs and monologues at the weekend. But when World War Two seems imminent, Gracie’s father sends the family away from Liverpool to a cottage in Wales. Life at the "Funk Hole" does not suit Gracie. And when a bull gets friendly in the blackout, she can’t take any more country life. She decides to marry her childhood friend. There has never been more than a kiss between Gracie and Archie but both sets of parents jump to the conclusion Gracie is pregnant. Hurt and angry Gracie doesn’t disillusion them and permission is given for the marriage. Archie tells Gracie they’ll make the lie come true on their honeymoon but they can’t manage to consummate the marriage before he’s called back to the frontline and Gracie has to fake a miscarriage.
Married in name only, she can’t relate to other married women but can’t be one of the girls. With only her husband’s infrequent, but sexy, letters and newly discovered rattling hormones for company, Gracie copes in her own inimitable way with life on the Home Front. Keeping hens seems a good idea until they break wartime regulations. Surely hens can’t be expected to negotiate the blackout curtain into the kitchen? As if the miseries of war aren’t enough, she falls in love with a soldier who isn’t her husband.


This is all set up. To escape life in the country Gracie marries her convenient childhood friend; he's off to war too soon and she falls in love with another guy. Then what? That's the dillemma.

5 comments:

December Quinn said...

I loved the first couple of sentences. WWII and a singing, dnacing city girl stuck in the country?

But then it just petered out, unfortunately. The story interests me, because I love WWII-set books and this could be a little like Land Girls which I adored.

But there's too much happening here, the hook lost me.

I Said said...

There's likely a very good story here, but the hook does get bogged down in events, making them commonplace rather than exciting to read about. I wondered about the childhood friend, seeings that she was now living away from home and out in the country where the father sent them to be safe.

Work on the hook; make it less "normal" life and a bit more interesting. Because I think it probably is a good story.

Anonymous said...

I guess maybe she saw marrying her childhood friend as her ticket out of the country? At that time weren't children under parents' control until they were 21?
Yeah it's a lousy hook but read between the lines and Grace has a sense of fun. And the dilemma of falling in love? We don't know from this how far falling in love took her and her husband is away fighting.

Anonymous said...

The author says:

Thanks, December, i said and anonymous.
Gracie does see marrying as a way to go back to living in a town. She's young and 'very innocent' which causes a few misunderstandings and she becomes known as DISGracie because of them. I see now I shouldn't have used the start of the novel for the hook, but taken something from further in and added more about her dilemma.

dana p said...

World's. Longest. Paragraph. Aaaiiieeee!

Okay, so it wasn't literally the longest, but it sure needs some breathers in there. I ended up losing my concentration and just skimming it. If the book is written in a similar style, I wouldn't be able to read it.

Also, why in the world would she have to fake a miscarriage? She needs to perpetuate the idea that she had premarital sex? Huh? You lost me there (and that was before I started skimming).