12.30.2006

HH Com 628

WHITEOUT is a completed 100,000 word steamy chick lit novel set in Australia.


What would you do if a suburban gypsy fortune-teller (who is also your nail technician) tells you that the love of your life waits for you at the top of a mountain? If you live in the flattest continent on earth, you might instantly think of world travel. Especially when you're about to finish your Tourism degree and can't wait to join the Mile High Club.

But a friend's engagement in the mountains of Victoria and the groom's lawyer colleague might mean love is a lot closer to home than expected. Or not, as he falls for the Best Friend and Roomie instead.

(your hook starts here)
But when you're down, the only way to go is up, and that's exactly where Melissa Morel is headed when she accepts to work a season in one of Australia's liveliest ski resorts.

She's decided it's time to take luck into her own hands if she wants that perfect career, home and love life by the end of uni. So she puts on her boots, adjusts her goggles and snowploughs down the double diamond black run of Mr. Might-Be-Rights towards her own version of Happy Ever After.

It's the hottest, driest and flattest continent on earth - the perfect place to go skiing!

A little short on plot points and specifics, but you've got a zippy voice and Aussie chix are kick ass by definition so you've got potential here.

4 comments:

Virginia Miss said...

Keep the best bits of this to describe the set-up, then add the plot complications/conflict to it.

Suggestion for which bits to keep:


When you're down, the only way to go is up, so that's exactly where Melissa Morel heads.

After a fortune-teller informs her the love of her life waits for her at the top of a mountain, Melissa goes to work for one of Australia's liveliest ski resorts. She puts on her boots, adjusts her goggles, and snow ploughs down the double diamond black run of Mr. Might-Be-Rights towards her own version of Happy Ever After.

BernardL said...

(your hook starts here)
'But when you're down, the only way to go is up, and that's exactly where Melissa Morel is headed when she accepts to work a season in one of Australia's liveliest ski resorts.'

I don't think this is a good place to start the hook. This elongated sentence incorporates the eternal cliché (But when you're down, the only way to go is up) and a terribly awkward and weak sentence ending (Melissa Morel is headed when she accepts to work a season in one of Australia's liveliest ski resorts).

xiqay said...

I once had a tee shirt that said "Looking for Mr. Quasi-Right."

This sounds like it might be fun. Good luck.

Anne said...

I agree it sounds fun and I like the tone. Good luck!