12.16.2006

HH Com 63

While searching for his ex-girlfriend's runaway cat, Hollywood actor Michael Chambers finds instead a shape-shifting doppelgänger intent on stealing his life. The shape-shifter works for a faction of militant faeries who want to cast a spell to literally turn Michael into his TV alter ego, The Mediator, a supernatural superhero whom they believe has the power to prevent a faerie war that would destroy both their world and Michael's. When the spell goes awry, it's up to Michael to transform himself from pampered celebrity to genuine hero in order to prevent an inter-dimensional apocalypse. Oh, and then there's the getting back his life. Stupid cat.

Well, KY likes the last part of course.
I kinda like the idea of militant faeiries. Do they live in Chelsea?

As hooks go, this isn't half bad but honest to dog my first reaction is "wtf". Maybe some of the comments can offer insight.

Remember, this isn't my genre at ALL, so consider the source.

26 comments:

ORION said...

This kind of reminds me of what Christopher Moore writes (Practical Demonkeeping...Fluke...etc).
It could be very cool if it is irreverent and funny. Hook just needs a bit of editing (I hate whenever anyone uses "literally")
JMHO

Anonymous said...

This sounds so much like Galaxy Quest, only with fairies instead of aliens... If you have anything spectacular to differentiate it, I'd put that up front.

inherwritename1 said...

"As hooks go, this isn't half bad but honest to dog my first reaction is "wtf". Maybe some of the comments can offer insight."

wtf, indeed.
I hope everyone is having as much fun as I am reading these posts. I'm going about my morning, punching the refresh button every so often. Thanks, Miss Snark, for brightening my day. I only hope I can say the same when my number is up, so to speak.

Kat said...

It's not a bad premise, it sounds funny as hell, and I haven't actually seen a fantasy take on that plotline yet. However, the general "aliens mistake actor for his character" thing has been done numerous times, most notably in the movie "Galaxy Quest", so you may want to concentrate more on how your version is different.

And I'd loose the word "literally". The sentence works better for me without. *end English Major nitpicking*

Inkwolf said...

I like the eerie faerie shapeshifter abduction angle, but frankly, the 'actor has to play his role for real' has been done frequently and prominently already. Galaxy Quest, for one, and Star Trek. And the human-is-the-only-one-who-can-save-the-fantasy-world angle is very VERY used.

Sorry...

Anonymous said...

Hilarious! And well, written. Nice job.

michaelgav said...

I don't read SFF, but this does recall a couple of movies for me, most particularly a picture in which Tim Allen, I think, is an actor who is drafted, in character, to save the universe, or the planet, or some other planet, or something. But the writer seems to have a light touch, and I liked the last sentence a lot. I would start reading this one, but I am among the chronically unemployed who drop off the radar of the Bureau of Labor Statistics, and not a publishing professional, so consider the source.

Anonymous said...

Militant fairies watch television? My money's on Desperate Housewives. No wait, Top Chef! Everyone knows militant fairies make a delicious canapes out of gas station fudge and cheese curls.

Maybe answer the questions why Michael Chambers, of all Hollywood supernatural superheroes, and what exactly happens during an inter-dimensional apocalypse?

Anonymous said...

I like this too. Only problem is that it makes me think of Saturday morning cartoons rather than adult fiction. Or could that be the sound of the TV coming from the other room?

RT

KingM said...

You'd have to do this really, REALLY well to pull it off. It's a Galaxy Quest type story, and not new. Not saying it couldn't be done well, but your hook, while not half bad, is not so brilliant that I think you can do it.

You're a decent writer and I think you'd do better with a more original idea.

Maureen McGowan said...

This isn't my genre either, but I laughed out loud... I did have to read it twice, but I think it sounds really fun. Not my genre aside... I'd read this book.

Jenn Moffatt said...

It is my genre and I like the idea a lot. I'd read it.

jeanjeanie said...

Well that wasn't as painful as I thought it would be. I probably deserve a nitwit crown, though, because after I started reading Miss Snark's comments on the first few entries I just knew she'd hate mine, and in my panic I fired off a revised hook. Any chance I can get away with blaming the peppermint schnapps in my hot chocolate?

Thanks for the feedback, everybody. The novel's still in progress so your comments are very helpful. Even if this ends up just being a practice novel, at least I'm having fun writing it.

"isn't half bad." *twirls*

Anonymous said...

I like the humor of it, and I like the idea of someone turning themselves into a hero. So if I saw this on the back of a paperback, I'd pick the book up and give it a chance.

Cya,
CC

Emmy Voter said...

This is my genre, in both senses -- the SFF sense and the TV in-joke sense -- and I love the premise. The writing of the hook is witty enough to make me hopeful that the book could carry off the premise with the necessary panache. If this was on the shelves I'd flip it open to read a page, and buy it if it didn't disappoint.

Anonymous said...

No, just, no. I like the genre you're writing in, but this hook makes me go "why him?" and "why would they watch his show?" It just doesn't hit my "suspend the disbelief" button. It's too unlikely, and has been done way too many times.

On the other hand, your writing style was exactly right to get a smile on my face, despite the foul mood I'm in right now. So, great writing, bad book.

Elfje

Bill Peschel said...

Let's not forget that Bruce Campbell's coming out with "My Name is Bruce," another GQ knockoff.

Dwight The Troubled Teen said...

I'm not the world's most ravenous consumer of SF/F, but this sounds like a fun, wild ride.

Sort of "Galaxy Quest" meets Maguyver.

If this were a backcover blurb, I'd definitely pick it up to read more.

HawkOwl said...

Ah, so that's what a "WTF" hook looks like. Looks like a bunch of already-done no-depth hand-waving to me.

Anonymous said...

Please do not use "awry" for this novel of yours. Wrong era.

Anonymous said...

Kat said:
And I'd loose the word "literally". The sentence works better for me without. *end English Major nitpicking*

Hoo boy! Love it when English Majors don't know the difference between "lose" and "loose".

Kat said...

Hoo boy! Love it when English Majors don't know the difference between "lose" and "loose".

Hey, don't fault my education. My professor had his hands full fixing my "effect/affect" confusion and my semicolon addiction in a paltry four years. The poor man was only human.

This is why my husband, also an English major, reads my manuscripts before anyone else. Damn you, linguistic blind spots!

Alice said...

I'd read it. I know it's quite Galaxy Quest, but I love that stuff. More urban faeries please!

Madeline F said...

"War For the Oaks" meets "Agent to the Stars." I like it. :) I'm curious what the bad effects are from the spell going awry (or perhaps "pear-shaped" would be a phrase more in keeping with the modern humor tone?).

jeanjeanie said...

The frustrating thing here is that it really isn't like Galaxy Quest at all. Proof positive that my hook still needs a lot of work.

Thanks again to everybody who commented.

~Nancy said...

I read fantasy (and I've never seen Galaxy Quest because I can't stand Tim Allen), and I enjoy humor in the fantasy that I read.

If you can keep up the humor in this, I'd buy it.

Good show, author!

~JerseyGirl