Dear Miss Snark,
As I was preparing a partial and a synopsis to go out to an agent this afternoon, I couldn't help but notice that my synopsis sucked. Not just a little suck. A suck like the Vaccu-flex 3000 Maxi-Bag. Not grammatically or logically or any of those quantifiable fashions, but stylistically. Quite simply, my amazing masterwork is presented as a tactless, gutted, unappealing skeleton of a novel in two concise pages.
Please tell me that the agent will glance briefly at this only to make sure that I didn't have any aliens landing with George Clooney to resolve the major plot issues at the end, and will then go on to read my brilliant prose in the novel itself?
How much weight does the synopsis carry?
The purpose of a synopsis is both what it has (plot, ending, narrative arc) and what it does not have (aliens arriving in chapter 14, no resolution/deus ex machina resolution, no plot at all).
I don't read your synopsis for style. That said, look at each word and see if there is a leaner, more kick ass word, a word with energy and vitality, you can use in its place.
You don't want every said to be snarled/hummed/purred/choked by any means.
You do however want Walther ppk rather than handgun; licensed to kill rather than tough guy; and Pussy Galore instead of everyone else.
I guess I've been watching too much Casino Royale.
You get the idea.
Kick ass and take names (instead of good luck)